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You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter Explain what has happened Request a refund Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date

You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter Explain what has happened Request a refund Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date RN0Lk
Dear Sir, My name is Henrik Christensen and I have recently enrolled in a 3 month English language course with your academy. A situation has arisen and I find that I have no option but to return home for the foreseeable future. A member of my family has become unwell and will require long term support. I believe that the school has a 7 day refund policy for circumstances such as this, and as I only paid for my course three days ago, I would like to take advantage of this and request my fees be returned to my account. Nonetheless, I am still determined to improve my English in the future, and I have been very impressive with your training facilities and teachers in the short time I have spent with you, so I would like to enquire as to whether it would be possible for me to return at some point in the future? Thanks for your understanding, H. Christensen
Dear Sir,

My name is Henrik Christensen and I have recently enrolled in a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "3-month"
3 month


English language course with your academy. A situation has arisen and I

find that I have no option
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to return home for the foreseeable future.

A member of my family has become unwell and will require long term

support.

I believe that the school has a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "7-day"
7 day
refund policy for circumstances such

as this, and as I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
paid for my course three days ago, I would like to

take advantage of this and request my fees
be returned
to my account.

Nonetheless, I am
still
determined to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my English in the future,

and I have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
impressive with your training facilities and teachers

in the short time I have spent with you,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I would like to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether", or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to".
as to whether
it would be possible for me to return at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point in the

future?

Thanks for your understanding,

H. Christensen
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IELTS letter You have just enrolled in a 12 week English class, but have found that you have a family problem and you will have to return home. Write to the school. In your letter Explain what has happened Request a refund Ask whether you will be able to return at a later date

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161 words
5.5
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