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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements.

You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Kan1

Dear, Mrs. Emma, I decided to write you this letter to discuss about our college cafeteria. Many students are using this space not only to take their lunch, but also to study and work on their projects. Unfortunately, there is some issue I have noticed since I am there almost every other day. In my opinion the music in cafeteria is too loud and not appropriate to it's environment. In another side, there is something we can improve. We have beside our cafeteria a nice terrace with the park view which have been closed through all year. Since the summer season started I suggest to use this area. I believe many students will be happy to work and spent time there. Therefore, it can fit more people and make a study more beneficial. Hope you will find my suggestion as an a good idea to make our college better. Looking forward to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Lucy Nuzam.

Dear, Mrs. Emma,

I decided to write you this letter to Did you mean simply "discuss our"? You do not need the word "about" here.discuss our
discuss about our
 college cafeteria. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
 students are using this space not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 to take their lunch, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 to study and work on their projects.

Unfortunately, there is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 issue I have noticed since I am there almost every other day. In my opinion the music in cafeteria is too loud and not appropriate Did you mean "to its environment"?to its environment
to it's environment
.

In another side, there is something we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
. We have beside our cafeteria a nice terrace with the park view which have been closed
 through all year. “Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
Consider using "summer".summer
the summer season
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 I suggest to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 this area. I believe This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 students will be happy to work and spent time there. Therefore
, it can fit more This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a study more beneficial.

Hope you will find my suggestion as Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "an" or "a" is left.ana
an a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 our college better. Looking forward In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".to hearing
to hear
 from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours faithfully
,

Lucy Possible spelling mistake found.GuamNamMuzakUAMUQAMAUCAM
Nuzam
. 