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Dear Sir, My name is Yash.I am writing this letter to discuss with you regarding the advertisement in the newspaper about the Animation seminar that have been taking place in USA. As , I am currenly working in Arena Animation as an assistant editor. So I would like to attend this seminar as it would be very helpful for me for developing my skills in animation. I would like to ask you about the information regarding dates of seminar ? So that accordinly I can book my flight tickets from India. In which city is the program held ? What is the Venue for seminar ?Is there any specific cost for this seminar ? Last but not the least, Is there any accomodation nearby ? What about cost of the hotel? Is there accomodation available close to the venue ? Please let me know the details so that I can accordingly arrange everything.I am very excited to attend this seminar . I look forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Yash

Dear Sir, My name is Yash. I am writing this letter to discuss with you regarding the advertisement in the newspaper about the Animation seminar that have been taking place in USA. As, I am currenly working in Arena Animation as an assistant editor. So I would like to attend this seminar as it would be very helpful for me for developing my skills in animation. I would like to ask you about the information regarding dates of seminar? So that accordinly I can book my flight tickets from India. In which city is the program held? What is the Venue for seminar? Is there any specific cost for this seminar? Last but not the least, Is there any accomodation nearby? What about cost of the hotel? Is there accomodation available close to the venue? Please let me know the details so that I can accordingly arrange everything. I am very excited to attend this seminar. I look forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Yash p0Ly
Dear Sir, My name is Yash. I am writing this letter to discuss with you regarding the advertisement in the newspaper about the Animation seminar that have been taking place in USA. As, I am currenly working in Arena Animation as an assistant editor. So I would like to attend this seminar as it would be very helpful for me for developing my skills in animation. I would like to ask you about the information regarding dates of seminar? So that accordinly I can book my flight tickets from India. In which city is the program held? What is the Venue for seminar? Is there any specific cost for this seminar? Last but not the least, Is there any accomodation nearby? What about cost of the hotel? Is there accomodation available close to the venue? Please let me know the details so that I can accordingly arrange everything. I am very excited to attend this seminar. I look forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Yash
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My name is
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Yash
. I am writing this letter to discuss with you regarding the advertisement in the newspaper about the Animation
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seminar
that have been taking place
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in USA
.

As, I am
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currenly
working in Arena Animation as an assistant editor.
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I would like to attend this
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seminar
as it would be
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very
helpful for me for developing my
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skills
in animation. I would like to ask you about the information regarding dates of
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seminar
?
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So that
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accordinly
I can book my flight tickets from India. In which city is the program held? What is the Venue for
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seminar
? Is there any specific cost for this seminar?

Last
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not the least, Is there any
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accomodation
nearby? What about cost of the hotel? Is there
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available close to the venue?
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let
me know the
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details
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that I can
accordingly
arrange everything. I am
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very
excited to attend this seminar.

I look forward
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to hear
from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Yash

IELTS letter Dear Sir, My name is Yash. I am writing this letter to discuss with you regarding the advertisement in the newspaper about the Animation seminar that have been taking place in USA. As, I am currenly working in Arena Animation as an assistant editor. So I would like to attend this seminar as it would be very helpful for me for developing my skills in animation. I would like to ask you about the information regarding dates of seminar? So that accordinly I can book my flight tickets from India. In which city is the program held? What is the Venue for seminar? Is there any specific cost for this seminar? Last but not the least, Is there any accomodation nearby? What about cost of the hotel? Is there accomodation available close to the venue? Please let me know the details so that I can accordingly arrange everything. I am very excited to attend this seminar. I look forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Yash

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