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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In you letter: Explain what you like about the cafeteria, Say what is wrong, Suggest how it could be improved.

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In you letter: Explain what you like about the cafeteria, Say what is wrong, Suggest how it could be improved. rwNo
Dear Sir/Ma'am, I am writing in connection with our college cafeteria. I enjoyed my everyday lunch there and evening snacks. Hereof, I reckon that it requires some modifications to improve. However, the cafeteria has various features such as wifi, melody music and an air conditioner. Despite that, It has a spacious place, neat and hygienic food, with plenty of desks and chairs, and polite staff. Hence, I enjoyed every moment there with my friends. Consequently, it needs various changes as the quality of food. From a few decades back, the students constantly having similar meals and beverages. In the modern age, the markets are full of brand new stock and flavours which supposed to be added in our canteen menu. Therefore, I would like to suggest that our education centre should take a survey of students to get their tastes and additional requirements. It could really help to improve the system of the food court. I am looking forward to your response in the near future. Yours Sincerely,
Dear Sir/Ma'am,

I am writing in connection with our college cafeteria. I enjoyed my everyday lunch there and evening snacks. Hereof, I reckon that it requires
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
modifications to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
.

However
, the cafeteria has various features such as
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi Alliance.)
wifi
, melody music and an air conditioner. Despite that, It has a spacious place, neat and hygienic food, with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of desks and chairs, and polite staff.
Hence
, I enjoyed every moment there with my friends.

Consequently
, it needs various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
as the quality of food. From a few decades back, the students
constantly
having similar meals and beverages. In the modern age, the markets are full of
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
stock and
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavours' is British English.
flavours
which supposed to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
in our canteen menu.

Therefore
, I would like to suggest that our education
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
should take a survey of students to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their tastes and additional requirements. It could
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the system of the food court.

I am looking forward to your response in the near future.

Yours
Sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In you letter: Explain what you like about the cafeteria, Say what is wrong, Suggest how it could be improved.

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168 words
6.0
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