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You did a bus tour with other people, however; you were not satisfied with the bus service Write a letter to the bus company about your journey and explain • What the problem with your tour was • Why you were not satisfied • Suggest how the company can improve

You did a bus tour with other people, however; you were not satisfied with the bus service Write a letter to the bus company about your journey and explain • What the problem with your tour was • Why you were not satisfied • Suggest how the company can improve VrQXJ
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to you about dissatisfaction with your bus service. I frequently travel with your tour agency having a good travel experience but this time I had a bad experience with your company. This time I was traveling with your bus no. MH 01 2518 onboarding ticket no. AWZXC from Mumbai to Ahmedabad on 13th January 2020. While traveling your bus on the said route I faced several problems. I was neither given a water bottle nor blanket during the whole journey. Because of the non-provision of the water bottle, I was not able to quench my thirst. Moreover, I was not able to sleep well on account of the non-supply of the blanket by your employees. I felt totally devastated during the itinerary which made me make a complaint about it to you. I have some suggestions for improving the quality of your services which may not cause any dissatisfaction with your customers including me in the future. First of all, I suggest you train your staff for the best customer service in the travel industry and secondly, I request you to advice your employees to put all the necessary items on the seat of the traveler in advance so that they don’t have to ask for those things during the journey. Hoping for prompt action in that regard. Yours Faithfully, Jack Marvel
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to you about dissatisfaction with your bus service. I
frequently
travel with your tour agency having a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
travel experience
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this time I had a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
experience with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

This time I was traveling with your bus no. MH 01 2518 onboarding ticket no.
Possible spelling mistake found.
AWZXC
from Mumbai to Ahmedabad on 13th January 2020.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
traveling your bus on the said route I faced several problems. I was neither
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a water bottle nor blanket during the whole journey.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of the non-provision of the water bottle, I was not able to quench my thirst.
Moreover
, I was not able to sleep well on account of the non-supply of the blanket by your employees. I felt
totally
devastated during the itinerary which made me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a complaint about it to you.

I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions for improving the quality of your services which may not cause any dissatisfaction with your customers including me in the future.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I suggest you train your staff for the best customer service in the travel industry and
secondly
, I request you to advice your employees to put all the necessary items on the seat of the traveler in advance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they don’t
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
those things during the journey.

Hoping for prompt action in that regard.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Jack Marvel
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IELTS letter You did a bus tour with other people, however; you were not satisfied with the bus service Write a letter to the bus company about your journey and explain • What the problem with your tour was • Why you were not satisfied • Suggest how the company can improve

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
228 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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