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You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer, express your gratitude and explain your like your current jo very much

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Mark Lester Marte. I am one of the successful applicants who have applied for the corporate head training program that will be assigned to you main headquarters at Osaka, Japan for one year. I am sending this letter to formally decline to the job offer due to personal matter. I am thankful that out of hundreds of applicants my application was selected. This will always be one of the highlights of my career for this year. My current company offered me to be part of Board of Director’s starting last week. This is one of the role I have asked to the owner of the company since I was promoted for managerial position. Turning down the offer will sound unreasonable since I have requested and work for it for the last five years. Sincerely yours, Mark Lester Marte

Dear Sir or Madam,

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IELTS letter You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer, express your gratitude and explain your like your current jo very much

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

144 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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