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You visited recently a museum with an elderly person,however he or she had difficulty walking around the museum.writ a letter to the manager and say:whom did you visit the museum with.what problems did he or she face.suggest a solution that will improve the museum visit experience for elderly person

Dear sir /madame, Iam writing to you, to express my annoyance on the experience that I have had with my grand father of our previous museum's visit on the last weekend. I really hope you consider my situation favorably. Let me describe and clarify the situation in more details, my grand father asked me to take him to the museum so that we would discover the recent portraits you have lately bought, unfortunately my grand father as an elderly person has a lot of difficulties in walking, thing that make the tour very rough, especially that the museum do not provide special facilities such as elevator or chairs for the elderlies, even if it consider one of the biggest museums in the city, as a result we couldn't continue to the up stairs and we just stayed at the ground floor. I would appreciate it if you give more attention to the elderlies and the disabilities people to make them feel more comfortable, consequently they will enjoy thier time. And for that i suggest to offer a number of chairs every where and an elevator as well as build more toilettes. Thank you for your consideration Sincerely, John smith
Dear sir /madame,
Iam
writing to you, to express my annoyance on the experience that I have had with my
grand father
of our previous museum's visit on the last weekend. I
really
hope you consider my situation
favorably
.
Let
me
describe
and clarify the situation in more
details
, my
grand father
asked me to take him to the museum
so
that we would discover the recent portraits you have lately
bought
, unfortunately my
grand father
as an elderly person has
a lot of
difficulties in walking, thing that
make
the tour
very
rough,
especially
that the museum do not provide special facilities such as elevator or chairs for the
elderlies
, even if it
consider
one of the biggest museums in the city,
as a result
we couldn't continue to the up
stairs and
we
just
stayed at the
ground floor
. I would appreciate it if you give more attention to the
elderlies
and the disabilities
people
to
make
them feel more comfortable,
consequently
they will enjoy
thier
time. And for that
i
suggest to offer
a number of chairs
every where
and an elevator
as well
as build more
toilettes
. Thank you for your consideration

Sincerely
,

John smith
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IELTS letter You visited recently a museum with an elderly person, however he or she had difficulty walking around the museum. writ a letter to the manager and say: whom did you visit the museum with. what problems did he or she face. suggest a solution that will improve the museum visit experience for elderly person

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
198 words
5.5
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