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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this email to formally complain about my current accommodation. I am finding it really hard to work in my room because I am sharing it with another student. I am a research student currently in my final year and as you can imagine I have lots of research assignments that sometimes extends into the night. My current roommate is a first year student and is only adjusting to the excitement of the freedom that college brings. She is always hosting parties and having friends over which creates a hostile environment for me to do my studies. I have reached out to her severally regarding the situation but the same happens over and over again. This arrangement is costing me because I am always running behind on my assignments and research projects. I would like to request that you find me another roommate who is at least in the same year of study as I am to avoid the conflict of schedules and interests as it is currently. Thanking you in advance for your help with this situation and finding me a new roommate. Yours Sincerely, Sarah Mumbi
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this email to
formally
complain about my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
accommodation. I am finding it
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to work in my room
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because
I am sharing it with another student.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a research student
currently
in my final year and as you can imagine I have lots of research assignments that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
extends into the night. My
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
roommate is a
first
year student and is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
adjusting to the excitement of the freedom that college brings. She is always hosting parties and having friends over which creates a hostile environment for me to do my studies. I have reached out to her
severally
regarding the
Use a comma before ‘but’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
situation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the same happens over and over again. This arrangement is costing me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am always running behind on my assignments and research projects.

I would like to request that you find me another roommate who is at least in the same year of study as I am to avoid the conflict of schedules and interests as it is
currently
. Thanking you in advance for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with this situation and finding me a new roommate.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Sarah
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Mumbi

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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191 words
6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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