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You borrowed something from your friend a while ago, but it has been damaged somehow. Write a letter to him/ her and say Remind him/her what you borrowed Explain what happened to it Suggest what you are going to do about it

You borrowed something from your friend a while ago, but it has been damaged somehow. Write a letter to him/ her and say Remind him/her what you borrowed Explain what happened to it Suggest what you are going to do about it jWBd
Dear Peter, I am writing a letter to you about borrowing a pen from you last week. However, I am so sorry to tell you that the pen has been damaged. Last Friday, I was searching for some books for my assignments in the school library but I forgot to bring my pen to mark down something important in my notebook. And then I was so lucky to meet you in the library and borrowed a pen from you. It was an accident that I put your pen on my desk in my bedroom while studying and then I was not careful to drop down it to the floor, and finally, it was damaged by my footstep. Anyway, I was so sorry to you for my mistakes and I will promise to buy a new pen for you instead as soon as possible. Once I buy the new pen which is similar to your previous one, I will give it to you next Friday. Finally, please accept my apology if you feel any inconvenience and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Gohan
Dear Peter,

I am writing a letter to you about borrowing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
from you
‘last week’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last week
.
However
, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
sorry to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
has
been damaged
.

Last Friday, I was searching for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
books for my assignments in the school library
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I forgot to bring my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
to mark down something
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
in my notebook. And then I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
lucky to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in the library and borrowed a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
from you.

It was an accident that I put your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
on my desk in my bedroom while studying and then I was not careful to
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "drop".
drop down
it to the floor, and
finally
, it
was damaged
by my footstep. Anyway, I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
sorry to you for my mistakes and I will promise to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
for you
instead
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Once I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pen
which is similar to your previous one, I will give it to you
next
Friday.

Finally
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
accept my apology if you feel any
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
inconvenience and
I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Gohan

IELTS letter You borrowed something from your friend a while ago, but it has been damaged somehow. Write a letter to him/ her and say Remind him/her what you borrowed Explain what happened to it Suggest what you are going to do about it

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  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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