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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain the important event apologise for the situation suggest a new arrangement

You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain the important event apologise for the situation suggest a new arrangement qw5X
Hello Sam, I hope you doing well. As you I was planning to come Canada for my vacation this year and I have asked you so much for the best time and place to visit as you are living over there for last 10 years. Now it seems that, I have to postpone this trip because we get appointment for my grandfather’s heart surgery and he wants everyone from family to be with him and the surgeon’s appointment is not easy to get. It took 6 months to us to take this appointment. I am really sorry for this as I know even you have applied your leaves as well to spend some time with me. However, after the surgery I can plan again for this trip in June and as you said before this would be great time to visit in Canada. Is that time will ok for you? I hope you will understand my situation and will suggest me further things for trip. Best wishes, Muhammad
Hello Sam,

I hope
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you doing
well. As
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I was planning to
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come
Canada for my vacation this year and I have asked you
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much for the best
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time
and place to visit as you are living over there for last 10 years.

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Now
it seems that, I
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have to
postpone this trip
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because
we
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get
appointment for my grandfather’s heart
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surgery and
he wants everyone from family to be with him and the surgeon’s appointment is not easy to
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get
. It took 6 months to us to take this appointment.

I am
really
sorry for this as I know even you have applied your
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leaves
as well
to spend
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some
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time
with me.
However
, after the surgery I can plan again for this trip in June and as you said
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before
this would be great
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time
to visit in Canada. Is that
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time
will ok for you?

I hope you will understand my situation and will suggest me
further
things for trip.

Best wishes,

Muhammad

IELTS letter You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter explain the important event apologise for the situation suggest a new arrangement

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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