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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter -explain the important event -apologise for the situation -suggest a new arrangement

Dear Cami, I’m writing you this time because I have something important to share with you. I know we’ve been planning this for so long but something really important came up and I won’t be able to visit you this summer. I’m so sorry for changing the date of the visit, but I know you’ll understand why I’m doing this… So, the thing is… I’m gonna be an aunt! And my sister goes into labor on January, my brother in law Works all summer away from home so I’m gonna stay with her for a few weeks to help until he comes back. But don’t worry Cami! I’m gonna visit you as soon as I can and I’ve been thinking… Autumn is such a better option to travel! It’s not gonna be so hot and there’ll be less tourism which is good! Hope to hear from you very soon, Yours sincerely, Estefi
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I won’t be able to visit you this summer.
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sorry for changing the date of the visit,
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I know you’ll understand why I’m doing this…

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, the thing is… I’m
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be an aunt! And my sister goes into labor on January, my
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brother in law
Works all summer away from home
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stay with her for a few weeks to
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until he
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back.

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don’t worry
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visit you as
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can and
I’ve been thinking… Autumn is such a better option to travel! It’s not
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be
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hot and there’ll be less tourism which is
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IELTS letter You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter -explain the important event -apologise for the situation -suggest a new arrangement

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
151 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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