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You are writing in a shool.You wold like to join a training course related to you work. Write a letter to your employer.

You are writing in a shool. You wold like to join a training course related to you work. Write a letter to your employer. dqG8P
Dear Sir, I am a teacher of your school. I am glad to work here because there are lots of opportunities for us. As far as I know the department is to hold an English treaning course. I am sure it is of great help to our English skills and take a high level CEFR certificate. I am noticed that the time of the this course is at 9 on Monday, Wednesday and Friday. I would like to have more experience in this course, which will help to give more information to pupils during the lesson. what trouble me that the course and work are the same time. As you know it is summer holiday and pupils do not come to school so our working hours begin at 9. That is why I beg you to allow me to come to work at 11 these days. Considering the outcome of the training course, I hope you will consider my suggestion. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully, Amy
Dear Sir, I am a teacher of your school. I am glad to work here
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there are lots of opportunities for us.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
far as I know the department is to hold an English
Possible spelling mistake found.
treaning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. I am sure it is of great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to our English
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and take a high level CEFR certificate. I
am noticed
that the time of
Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only "the" or "this" is left.
the this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is at 9 on Monday, Wednesday and Friday.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to have more experience in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to give more information to pupils during the lesson.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
what
trouble me that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
and work are the same time. As you know it is summer holiday and pupils do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to school
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
our working hours
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
at 9.
That is
why I beg you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to work at 11 these days. Considering the outcome of the training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I hope you will consider my suggestion. Thank you for your attention. Yours
faithfully
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Amy
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IELTS letter You are writing in a shool. You wold like to join a training course related to you work. Write a letter to your employer.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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