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You are the nurse in a Community Health Centre. A patient you have been monitoring is moving to another city to live with his daughter. PATIENT DETAILS: Name: Mr Peter Dunbar DOB: 18 Mar 1932 Current medication: Metformin 500mg t.d.s (oral hypoglycaemic) Ramipril 5mg daily (anti-hypertensive, ACE inhibitor) – for hypertension Warfarin variable 3-5mg (anti-coagulant) Sotalol 40mg daily (beta blocker) Treatment record: Sep 2017 Diagnosed with type 2 diabetes August 2016. Fasting blood sugar levels (BSL) = 9 Doctor recommended dietary management: low-fat, low-sugar, calorie restriction; limit alcohol. ÓExercise Pt lives at home with wife. Wife cooks. Wife managing dietary requirements, but Pt likes 2-3 glasses wine with meals Dec 2017 Wife deceased. Pt depressed/grieving. Referred back to doctor for monitoring/medicating Fasting BSL = 9. Pt non-compliant with diet. Excessive fat, salt, sugar, alcohol (wine/beer) Mar 2018 Doctor prescribed metformin (oral hypoglycaemic agent). Now Pt cook

You are the nurse in a Community Health Centre. A patient you have been monitoring is moving to another city to live with his daughter. PATIENT DETAILS: Name: Mr Peter Dunbar DOB: 18 Mar 1932 Current medication: Metformin 500mg t. d. s (oral hypoglycaemic) Ramipril 5mg daily (anti-hypertensive, ACE inhibitor) – for hypertension Warfarin variable 3-5mg (anti-coagulant) Sotalol 40mg daily (beta blocker) Treatment record: Sep 2017 Diagnosed with type 2 diabetes August 2016. Fasting blood sugar levels (BSL) = 9 Doctor recommended dietary management: low-fat, low-sugar, calorie restriction; limit alcohol. ÓExercise Pt lives at home with wife. Wife cooks. Wife managing dietary requirements, but Pt likes 2-3 glasses wine with meals Dec 2017 Wife deceased. Pt depressed/grieving. Referred back to doctor for monitoring/medicating Fasting BSL = 9. Pt non-compliant with diet. Excessive fat, salt, sugar, alcohol (wine/beer) Mar 2018 Doctor prescribed metformin (oral hypoglycaemic agent). Now Pt cook bQkRW
Community Health Nurse Eastern Community Health Center 456 East Street Centreville 22 January 2019 Dear Nurse Re: Mr Peter Dunbar DOB 18. 03. 1932 Thank you for accepting Mr Dunbar into your care for the regular monitoring of his diabetes and encouragement to comply with his medication and dietary regimens. Mr Dunbar is moving to Centreville to live with his daughter. Since October 2018, Mr Dunbar has shown signs of diabetic neuropathy and consequently mobilizes with a walking stick. His type 2 diabetes is controlled by metformin and through his diet, however, he remains resistant to any form of treatment, and has not been compliant with his medication regimen, reporting poor memory as the primary cause of his neglect. On occasion, he also double doses. Contrary to advice, Mr Dunbar has continued to consume excessive amounts of alcohol, fatty foods, salt and sugar since the death of his wife last year, contributing to his current condition. While his daughter will now be cooking for him, she will require a number of guidance related to his needs. In June 2018, he suffered a myocardial infarction for which he was hospitalized at City Hospital in Newton. He was diagnosed with atrial fibrillation on the same admission and was subsequently prescribed warfarin and sotalol. His hypertension is controlled by Ramipril. As with his other medication, Mr Dunbar is intermittent in his compliance. Thank you for your continued management of this patient. Yours faithfully, rn
Community Health Nurse

Eastern Community Health Center

456 East Street

Centreville


22 January 2019

Dear Nurse

Re: Mr Peter Dunbar

DOB 18. 03. 1932

Thank you for accepting Mr Dunbar into your care for the regular monitoring of his diabetes and encouragement to

comply with his medication and dietary regimens. Mr Dunbar is moving to
Centreville
to
live
with his daughter.

Since October 2018, Mr Dunbar has shown signs of diabetic neuropathy and
consequently
mobilizes with a walking

stick. His type 2 diabetes
is controlled
by metformin and through his diet,
however
, he remains resistant to any form of

treatment, and has not been compliant with his medication regimen, reporting poor memory as the primary cause of

his neglect. On occasion, he
also
double doses. Contrary to advice, Mr Dunbar has continued to consume excessive

amounts of alcohol, fatty foods, salt and sugar since the death of his wife last year, contributing to his
current


condition. While his daughter will
now
be cooking for him, she will require
a number of guidance
related to his needs.

In June 2018, he suffered a myocardial infarction for which he
was hospitalized
at City Hospital in Newton. He
was diagnosed
with atrial fibrillation on the same admission and was
subsequently
prescribed warfarin and
sotalol
. His

hypertension
is controlled
by
Ramipril
. As with his other medication, Mr Dunbar is intermittent in his compliance.

Thank you for your continued management of this patient.

Yours
faithfully
,
rn
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IELTS letter You are the nurse in a Community Health Centre. A patient you have been monitoring is moving to another city to live with his daughter. PATIENT DETAILS: Name: Mr Peter Dunbar DOB: 18 Mar 1932 Current medication: Metformin 500mg t. d. s (oral hypoglycaemic) Ramipril 5mg daily (anti-hypertensive, ACE inhibitor) – for hypertension Warfarin variable 3-5mg (anti-coagulant) Sotalol 40mg daily (beta blocker) Treatment record: Sep 2017 Diagnosed with type 2 diabetes August 2016. Fasting blood sugar levels (BSL) = 9 Doctor recommended dietary management: low-fat, low-sugar, calorie restriction; limit alcohol. ÓExercise Pt lives at home with wife. Wife cooks. Wife managing dietary requirements, but Pt likes 2-3 glasses wine with meals Dec 2017 Wife deceased. Pt depressed/grieving. Referred back to doctor for monitoring/medicating Fasting BSL = 9. Pt non-compliant with diet. Excessive fat, salt, sugar, alcohol (wine/beer) Mar 2018 Doctor prescribed metformin (oral hypoglycaemic agent). Now Pt cook

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