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You are teacher at a school. A local company has recently given your school money for sports equipment. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter Express your gratitude for the money Describe how the money will be spent Explain how the sports equipment will benefit the students

You are teacher at a school. A local company has recently given your school money for sports equipment. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter Express your gratitude for the money Describe how the money will be spent Explain how the sports equipment will benefit the students kjL08
Dear Mr. Tom, I am writing to express my gratitude for the financial aid provided by you in order to arrange sports equipment which is a great help for us. I am very glad that we got some arrangments related to the financial need where we were lagging in order to purchase new equipments for sports although we tried whatever we have, that was not enough to get the needful items, so with the help now we are able to get the items and our school will be benifited. In our school there are lot of students who are interested in playing various types of sports which include both indoor and outdoor like table tennis, badminton, basketball so we will be spending money in purchasing suitable items specially there is a huge demand and popularity for table tennis and badminton and last but not least a basketball. With all the above items we will be able to encourage our school students to participate in various sports and this will full fill their desire to play the specific games for instance table tennis not only this will be a nice entertainment for students but also will improve their health by doing some physical activities. Once again I am very grateful for your kind support Yours Sincerely Rahul Kumar
Dear Mr. Tom,

I am writing to express my gratitude for the financial aid provided by you in order to arrange
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sports
equipment which is a great
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help
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very
glad that we
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got
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some
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arrangments
related to the financial need where we were lagging in order to
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purchase
new equipments for
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sports
although we tried whatever we have, that was not
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enough
to
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get
the needful
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items
,
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so
with the
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help
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now
we are able to
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get
the
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items
and our school will be
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benifited
.

In our school there are
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lot of
students who
are interested
in playing various types of
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sports
which include both indoor and outdoor like table tennis, badminton, basketball
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so
we will be spending money in purchasing suitable
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items
specially
there is a huge demand and popularity for table tennis and badminton and last
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but
not least a basketball.

With all the above
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items
we will be able to encourage our school students to participate in various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
and this will full fill their desire to play the specific games
for instance
table tennis not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this will be a nice entertainment for students
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but
also
will
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improve
their health by doing
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some
physical activities.

Once again I am
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very
grateful for your kind support

Yours
Sincerely


Rahul Kumar
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IELTS letter You are teacher at a school. A local company has recently given your school money for sports equipment. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter Express your gratitude for the money Describe how the money will be spent Explain how the sports equipment will benefit the students

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216 words
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