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You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company

Dear Sir I am writing you this letter to discuss about the course which I am currently pursuing to raise my qualification. As I spoke to you earlier that I have enrolled myself in PGDM in Buisness Analytics in Great Lakes Institute which is based out of US. As this is full time 2 year course, so it demands not only utmost focus and determination but also my conscientious. Hence, I need some time off from office. As you're my Godfather and you're familiar with my deep interests in gaining knowledge in analytics domain. A couple of months back, I came to know about Artificial intelligence and machine learning, Hence, I decided to undergo extensive learning course in the macro-analytics so as to update my skills in IT. I want to complete this course within designated time frame, else I have to pay extra amount in the form of penalty. Therefore, I request to give me some time off from my work as this course needs ample amount of time for complete learning and hands on different tools. I assure you that after a year or so I'll definitely join this company back. However, if you'll need my help in the intervening period, I'll definitely show my presence to tackle/ sort any issue. Also, once I'll complete this course, it is going to extremely helpful not only for me but also for the organization. We can analyze and interpret big data easily and accurately with the help of advanced tools which in turn is indispensable for increasing revenue of the company. Hope to get positive response with complete consideration on my issue. Regards Alka Bhat
Dear Sir

I am writing you this letter to
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discuss about the
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course
which I am
currently
pursuing to raise my qualification.

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As
I spoke to you earlier that I have enrolled myself in
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PGDM
in
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Buisness
Analytics in Great Lakes Institute which
is based
out of US.

As this is full
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time
2 year
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course
,
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so
it demands not
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only
utmost focus and determination
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but
also
my conscientious.
Hence
, I need
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some
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time
off from office.

As you're my
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Godfather and
you're familiar with my deep interests in gaining knowledge in analytics domain. A couple of months back, I came to know
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about


Artificial intelligence and machine learning,
Hence
, I decided to undergo extensive learning
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course
in the macro-analytics
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so as to
update my
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skills
in IT.

I want to
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complete
this
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course
within designated
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time
frame, else I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay extra amount in the form of penalty.
Therefore
, I request to give me

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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time
off from my work as this
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course
needs ample amount of
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time
for
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complete
learning and hands on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
tools.

I assure you that after a year or
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so
I'll definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
this
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company
back.
However
, if you'll need my
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help
in the intervening period, I'll definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
my presence

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to
tackle/ sort any issue.
Also
, once I'll
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complete
this
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course
, it is going to
extremely
helpful not
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only
for me
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but
also
for the organization. We can analyze and interpret

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big
data
easily
and
accurately
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of advanced tools which in turn is indispensable for increasing revenue of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response with
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complete
consideration on my issue.

Regards

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Alka
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Bhat
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IELTS letter You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company

Letter
  American English
11 paragraphs
274 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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