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You and your colleagues have recently attended a foreign language training course organized by your company. Now you all want to do some more language training. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, say how you and your colleagues felt about the course explain why you all want to do more language training suggest when and where the training could take place

Dear Sir Or Madam, First of all I would like to congratulate you and your team for the wonderful training you have presented last Friday. The module clearly outline the topics which is useful during the discussion. We also appreciate the instructor eagerness to explain clearly the lesson considering some of my colleagues have no background with French Language. Since most of my colleague will go to France next month for work related visit, we would like to request if we could set for another session. Our management have agreed with this proposal since their business trip will be for half a year. The module we will request for the discussion will be the advance class. The propose date will be starting next Monday and hopefully to cover the discussion by one week. We will allocate the whole week from 8: 00 in the morning until 5: 00 in the afternoon. This is to ensure all of the topics will be cover including a one on one training. The proposed location for the class will be in our office and all required material will be readily available. Hoping to hear from you. Yours sincerly, Francis Dacera
Dear Sir Or Madam,

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.
First of all
I would like to congratulate you and your team for the wonderful training you have presented last Friday. The module
clearly
outline the topics which is useful during the discussion. We
also
appreciate the instructor eagerness to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
clearly
the lesson considering
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of my colleagues have no background with French Language.

Since most of my colleague will go to France
next
month for work related visit, we would like to request if we could set for another session. Our management have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
with this proposal since their business trip will be for half a year. The module we will request for the discussion will be the advance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
.

The
The word “propose” is a verb. The noun is spelled “proposal”.
propose
date will be starting
next
Monday and
hopefully
to cover the discussion by one week. We will allocate the whole week from 8: 00 in the morning until 5: 00 in the afternoon. This is to ensure
Consider using “all the”.
all of the
topics will be cover including a one on one training. The proposed location for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
will be in our office and all required material will be
readily
available.

Hoping to hear from you.

Yours
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sincerly
,

Francis
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dacera

IELTS letter You and your colleagues have recently attended a foreign language training course organized by your company. Now you all want to do some more language training. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, say how you and your colleagues felt about the course explain why you all want to do more language training suggest when and where the training could take place

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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