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During a recent plane journey you sat next to a businessman who owns the chain of restaurants you talk to him and he suggests that you should connect him about a possible job in one of these restaurants

Dear Mr Walter I’m John. I am writing this letter for you. If you remember, we had met in the plane when we going to German one week ago. As you know, we talked together about you’re busyness and that’s time you explain for me about your restaurants in some countries. Furthermore, you says me that you want expansion your restaurant and need to help sales manager for your restaurants. As you know I was explain for you about my job. At the moment I will get my masters degree about digital marketing in the three months later. However, I’m working at the big company for sales manager but I would like that reach to better degree in the future. On the other side. I attending in training course about digital marketing privately. I would be better placed in today’s job market after doing this job. As you said, you need to young experience manager in field digital marketing for all your restaurant. I hope to hear from your regarding this matter as soon as possible. Thank you. Your sincerely John

Dear Mr Walter

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Your sincerely


John