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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem r3pL

Dear Madam/Sir, I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the accommodation that was provided for my course of study. I have enrolled for art class lasting 3 months, and I have been provided with a room that I would need to share with 3 others. Considering the size of the room and the nature of my course, it is very uncomfortable to work on my day to day activities thus impacting the overall score of my course. I was under the assumption that the students would be provided with individual rooms or if in case of large room, it would not be shared by more than two students. This would enable to work on my daily tasks with more freedom and relaxed mind. Request you to provide a single accommodation, and if it's not possible, please provide me a room where I need to share only with one more student preferably from art class. I look forward to hearing from you. Regards, Praveen T.

Dear Madam/Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with the accommodation that was provided
 for my course of study. I have enrolled for art This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 lasting 3 months, and I have been provided
 with a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 that I would need to share with 3 others. Considering the size of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 and the nature of my course, it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 uncomfortable to work on my It appears that two hyphens are missing.day-to-day
day to day
 activities thus
 impacting the overall
 score of my course.

I was under the assumption that the students would be provided
 with individual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
rooms
 or if in case of large You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
, it would not be shared
 by more than two students. This would enable to work on my daily tasks with more freedom and relaxed mind.

Request you to provide a single accommodation, and if it's not possible, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 provide me a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 where I need to share This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 with one more student preferably
 from art This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Regards,

Praveen T. 

IELTS letter You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

167 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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