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You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your original language. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new language Asking him/her for suggestions on how to learn more quickly Proposing that you meet your friend to talk about these steps

You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your original language. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new language Asking him/her for suggestions on how to learn more quickly Proposing that you meet your friend to talk about these steps 9nR0
Dear Mr. Cooper, I am writing in regards to a laptop which I bought from your store on 25th February 2021. My concern with this is that at first when I started using the laptop at home it was working fine but suddenly after three days, the screen started to show random colours and I think that the display of the laptop is defective and also the speakers are not loud enough for use. I, therefore, ask you to issue an immediate return and process the refund on my credit card as it was mentioned in the warranty documents. Also, I would really appreciate you to check if there is any other laptop available in the same price range and specifications to buy, so that I can start using the new one immediately for my use. I look forward to the confirmation that it has been received and kindly issue me a reference number so that I can address this problem in the future easily(if needed). Kind Regards, Karampal
Dear Mr. Cooper,

I am writing
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in regards to
a
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laptop
which I
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bought
from your store on 25th February 2021. My concern with this is that at
first
when I
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started
using the
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laptop
at home it was working fine
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but
suddenly
after three days, the screen
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started
to
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show
random
Possible spelling mistake. 'colours' is British English.
colours
and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the display of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
is defective and
also
the speakers are not loud
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

I,
therefore
, ask you to issue an immediate return and process the refund on my credit card as it
was mentioned
in the warranty documents.
Also
, I would
really
appreciate you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
if there is any other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
available in the same price range and specifications to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
using the new one immediately for my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

I look forward to the confirmation that it has
been received
and kindly issue me a reference number
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can address this problem in the future
easily
(if needed).

Kind Regards,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Karampal

IELTS letter You are currently trying to improve your knowledge of a language which is not your original language. You have a friend who speaks this new language perfectly. Write to your friend, Explaining why you want to learn this new language Asking him/her for suggestions on how to learn more quickly Proposing that you meet your friend to talk about these steps

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168 words
6.0
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