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You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses.

You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. e5ypO

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Amit Sharma from New Delhi in India. I have recently registered for the Advance computer program course under the four month batch in your university. I would like to know about the accommodation and what kind of facility for the student if they will hostel, Also i will be good if any family host the accommodation near by the campus. Because last year I completed my Bachelor degree form London School of Business and in London i was staying with one family for last three year, so that’s why my preference with staying with a family and i want to avoid the home sickness and outside / street food. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Your’s faithfully. Amit Sharma

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Amit Sharma from New Delhi in India. I have recently registered for the Advance computer program course under the When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "four-month"four-month
four month
 batch in your university.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 would like to know about the accommodation and what kind of facility for the student if they will hostel, Also
Did you mean "I"?I
i
 will be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 if any family host the accommodation Did you mean "nearby"?nearby
near by
 the campus. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
 last year I completed my Bachelor degree form London School of Business and in London Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 was staying with one family for last three year, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that’s why my preference with staying with a family and Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 want to avoid the home sickness and outside / street food.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Did you mean "Your" or "Yours"?YourYours
Your’s
faithfully
.

Amit Sharma

IELTS letter You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses.

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American English

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124 words

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