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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. v. 4

Dear Mr Ross, Hope you are doing excellent. I am writing this letter on behalf of “Omega Music Group” to let you know how sorry and disappointed we really are after learning that we will not be able to use the community hall for the purpose of practising music. Not sure what exactly led you to take this decision, but we have been practising music on Monday and Wednesday evening in this community hall for more than two years without any issue. By the way, we also try to help the young high school students in our community to learn different types of band music so that they can also become some expert musicians in future. We also try to organize musical concerts on different occasions in our city for free to raise funds for humanitarian causes, apart from attending community welfare programmes. So, as you can see, we are not causing any harm to the community, rather uplifting its spirit. Therefore, I would like to request you to reconsider your decision and allow us to keep practising on any other days, possibly on weekends, if Monday and Wednesday evenings are not convenient for you. Yours sincerely, Timothy Lee

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Monday and Wednesday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. v.4

Dear Mr Ross,

Hope you are doing excellent. I am writing this letter on behalf of “Omega Music Group” to
let
you know how sorry and disappointed we
really
are after learning that we will not be able to
use
the
community
hall for the purpose of
practising
music.

Not sure what exactly led you to take this decision,
but
we have been
practising
music on Monday and Wednesday evening in this
community
hall for more than two years without any issue. By the way, we
also
try to
help
the young high school students in our
community
to learn
different
types of band music
so
that they can
also
become
some
expert musicians
in future
. We
also
try to organize musical concerts on
different
occasions in our city for free to raise funds for humanitarian causes, apart from attending
community
welfare
programmes
.

So
, as you can
see
, we are not causing any harm to the
community
,
rather
uplifting its spirit.
Therefore
, I would like to request you to reconsider your decision and
allow
us to
keep
practising
on any other days,
possibly
on weekends, if Monday and Wednesday evenings are not convenient for you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Timothy Lee
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