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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice You should write at least 150 words.

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice kYeNN
Dear manager, I hope you are doing well. I am wiriting this letter on behalf Alpha musical band to share our concern that how disappointed we feel when we come to know about that we are no longer be able to use community hall for music practice. We have been practicing on Tuesday and Friday in the evening in your community hall for more than 3 years. We also try to help secondary school students to learn different type of music, so that they can get start for music carrier with no cost. we also organise freeconcerts on different occasions in our city where we do fundraising for childcare NGO. So, as you see, we are causing any harm to community but we try to help our society by helping them with different ways with our music practice. Therefor, I would like to request you to reconsider your decision and allows us to practice in community hall. I am hoing positive response from you. Your sincerely, Susan
Dear manager,

I hope you are doing well. I am
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wiriting
this letter on behalf Alpha musical band to share our concern that how disappointed we feel when we
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come
to know about that we are no longer be able to
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use
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community
hall for
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music
practice.

We have been practicing on Tuesday and Friday in the evening in your
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community
hall for more than 3 years. We
also
try to
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help
secondary school students to learn
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different
type of
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music
,
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so
that they can
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get
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start
for
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music
carrier with no cost.
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we
also
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organise
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freeconcerts
on
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different
occasions in our city where we
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do fundraising
for childcare NGO.

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So
, as you
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see
, we are causing any harm to
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community
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but
we try to
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help
our society by helping them with
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different
ways with our
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music
practice. Therefor, I would like to request you to reconsider your decision and
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allows
us to practice in
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community
hall.

I am
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hoing
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positive
response from you.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

Susan

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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166 words
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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