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You recently helped organize a college ski trip and you have received an email from Ms. Janet a parent of one of the students. Read part of her email below: I understand you were one of the organizers of our son's ski trip. I have to say my husband and I were extremely dissatisfied with the arrangements. You know my son and his classmates were eager to join the trip at first. But when he came home, my son informed us that the lessons were fewer than promised and the accommodation was inadequate. Can you please give us a satisfactory explanation? Write an email responding to Ms. Janet. You should write at least 120 words. You do not need to include your name or addresses.

You recently helped organize a college ski trip and you have received an email from Ms. Janet a parent of one of the students. Read part of her email below: I understand you were one of the organizers of our son's ski trip. I have to say my husband and I were extremely dissatisfied with the arrangements. You know my son and his classmates were eager to join the trip at first. But when he came home, my son informed us that the lessons were fewer than promised and the accommodation was inadequate. Can you please give us a satisfactory explanation? Write an email responding to Ms. Janet. You do not need to include your name or addresses. E3NAM
Dear Ms. Janet, First, I would like to apologize for the disappointment of your son on our ski trip. We also extremely regret this situation. As mentioned in the advertisement that this trip is just for our course experience so the lesson will be limited. Therefore, it may not have reached your child's high expectations. In relation to accommodation, I am not quite sure what you are referring to. If possible you can describe me in more detail in the following email. However, I am sure that the accommodation has been prepared in the best way by our staffs. We would like to assure you that we take all complaints seriously. Yours sincerely, Somi.
Dear Ms. Janet,

First
, I would like to apologize for the disappointment of your son on our ski trip. We
also
extremely
regret this situation.

As mentioned in the advertisement that this trip is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for our course experience
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the lesson will
be limited
.
Therefore
, it may not have reached your child's high expectations.

In relation to accommodation, I am not quite sure what you are referring to.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
possible you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
me in more detail in the following email.
However
, I am sure that the accommodation has
been prepared
in the best way by our staffs.

We would like to assure you that we take all complaints
seriously
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Somi
.
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IELTS letter You recently helped organize a college ski trip and you have received an email from Ms. Janet a parent of one of the students. Read part of her email below: I understand you were one of the organizers of our son's ski trip. I have to say my husband and I were extremely dissatisfied with the arrangements. You know my son and his classmates were eager to join the trip at first. But when he came home, my son informed us that the lessons were fewer than promised and the accommodation was inadequate. Can you please give us a satisfactory explanation? Write an email responding to Ms. Janet. You do not need to include your name or addresses.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
114 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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