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You are organising family party. Write letter of invitation

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Dear Mr. George. I am writing to tell you about a birthday party I am organising for the evening of Friday 15th August. The party will be held in honour of my grandfather's 90th birthday. I mean this party as a surprise for him. I am going to invite all my relatives, family friends and colleagues. There will be many elderly people in the party. On behalf of my family, I would like to invite you to such a wonderful event. I sincerely hope that you will be able to attend there. At the event, dance, singing will be performed to make it more enjoyable. We have some games like musical chairs which will be enjoyed by all. Every guest will be looked after, there will be soft music in the background and a lot of snacks, even the cake cutting ceremony is going to be nicely arranged. There will be about 100 guests. The party will be on 15th August at 7. 30 at Hilton Hotel. In case you do not know the way, it is located in Yunusobod street 25. We would be grateful if you could be present at the event. Yours sincerely, Raman Sharma
Dear Mr. George.

I am writing to
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tell
you about a birthday
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party
I am
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organising
for the evening of Friday 15th August.

The
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party
will
be held
in
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honour
of my grandfather's 90th birthday. I mean this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
as a surprise for him. I am going to invite all my relatives, family friends and colleagues. There will be
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many
elderly
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people
in the party.

On behalf of my family, I would like to invite you to such a wonderful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
. I
sincerely
hope that you will be able to attend there.

At the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
, dance, singing will
be performed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it more enjoyable. We have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
games like musical chairs which will
be enjoyed
by all. Every guest will
be looked
after, there will be soft music in the background and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
snacks, even the cake cutting ceremony is going to be
nicely
arranged. There will be about 100 guests. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
will be on 15th August at 7. 30 at Hilton Hotel. In case you do not know the way, it
is located
in
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Yunusobod
street 25.

We would be grateful if you could be present at the
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event
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Raman
Sharma
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IELTS letter You are organising family party. Write letter of invitation

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
197 words
5.5
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