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You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture

You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture 0ppGn
Dear John Masters Hi, I am writing this letter with regards to such problems which we encountered with some of our kitchen staff. About 2days ago we found out some of our foodstuffs got rotten, however they were in fridge. It seemed that there is a problem with the fridge. We call the relevant services and after their inspection they told us that the fridge's engine is broken and needs to be changed. Moreover, the closet of the master room squeaks alot, and as I have an old father he cannot sleep well because of this issue. I would like to ask you to buy a new fridge in your earliest convenience, and to change the closet door if it is possible. Thank you in advance for you attention. Best regards, Mahsa Rahmani
Dear John Masters

Hi,

I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
such problems which we encountered with
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some
of our kitchen staff.

About 2days ago we found out
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some
of our foodstuffs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
rotten,
however
they were in fridge. It seemed that there is a problem with the fridge. We call the relevant services and after their inspection they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
us that the fridge's engine
is broken
and needs to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
.

Moreover
, the closet of the master room squeaks
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alot
, and as I have an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
father he cannot sleep well
because of this
issue.

I would like to ask you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new fridge in your earliest convenience, and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the closet door if it is possible.

Thank you in advance for you attention.

Best regards,

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Mahsa
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Rahmani

IELTS letter You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture

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  American English
8 paragraphs
132 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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