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You are not happy with the course you are doing at the college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: • What course are you doing now? • Why you are not satisfied with that course? • What course would you like to change?

You are not happy with the course you are doing at the college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: • What course are you doing now? • Why you are not satisfied with that course? • What course would you like to change? nQpK
Dear Mr. Hodgkins, I am currently enrolled in an Italian cooking class at St. James and am writing regarding some difficulties I have had doing this subject for the past two weeks. I would like to know if it is possible to change my course. I believe that the last day allowed for students to make any changes was Wednesday 5th June but, in my situation, the circumstance is uncompromising. The fact is that, during the enrolment session, no one mentioned that I needed to be literate in Italian, which I’m not. Therefore, you will comprehend that for me, getting an understanding of what the teacher is saying is beyond comprehensible. Thus, I am requesting that my current enrollment be transferred from the Italian course to the French cooking class. As unlike in Italian, I am fluent in French. I apologise for any inconvenience this may cause to you and the staff and look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sandrine
Dear Mr.
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Hodgkins
,

I am
currently
enrolled in an Italian cooking
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class
at St. James and
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am
writing regarding
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some
difficulties I have had doing this subject for the past two weeks. I would like to know if it is possible to
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change
my course.

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I
believe that the last day
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allowed
for students to
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make
any
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changes
was Wednesday 5th June
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but
, in my situation, the circumstance is uncompromising. The fact is that, during the
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enrolment
session, no one mentioned that I needed to be literate in Italian, which I’m not.
Therefore
, you will comprehend that for me, getting an understanding of what the teacher is saying is beyond comprehensible.
Thus
, I am requesting that my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
enrollment
be transferred
from the Italian course to the French cooking
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class
. As unlike in Italian, I am fluent in French.

I
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apologise
for any inconvenience this may cause to you and the staff and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Sandrine

IELTS letter You are not happy with the course you are doing at the college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: • What course are you doing now? • Why you are not satisfied with that course? • What course would you like to change?

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6.0
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