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You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club. Write a letter to the manager of the golf club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you could start

You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club. Write a letter to the manager of the golf club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you could start k8RK
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my sincere interest for a part time job at your golf club. My name is Mr. John Wood. I live in London, United Kingdom. I am a retired professional golfer and a certified golf coach as well. I have more than 18 years of extensive experience in golf which includes coaching at all levels, mentorship and high-performance analyst as well. Currently, I am on short consultant stint with one of the golf club in Dublin, Ireland and the contract is due to end tomorrow. In addition to the above, I was awarded with Grade “A” coach certificate in golf, which is regarded as the highest certificate for any golf coach in our country. Moreover, I possess a high-performance analyst certificate which qualifies me to analyse players technical flaws. Furthermore, I have also worked as a mental conditioning coach for various franchisees. I request you to consider all the above credentials and employ me for this temporary role, I can be a part of your golf club soon after receiving the offer based upon your convenience. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, John Wood
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my sincere interest for a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
job at your golf club.

My name is Mr. John Wood. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in London, United Kingdom. I am a retired professional golfer and a certified golf
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coach
as well
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have more than 18 years of extensive experience in golf which includes coaching at all levels, mentorship and high-performance analyst
as well
.
Currently
, I am on short consultant stint with one of the golf club in Dublin, Ireland and the contract is due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
tomorrow.

In addition
to the above, I
was awarded
with Grade “A”
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coach
certificate in golf, which
is regarded
as the highest certificate for any golf
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coach
in our country.
Moreover
, I possess a high-performance analyst certificate which qualifies me to
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
players technical flaws.
Furthermore
, I have
also
worked as a mental conditioning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
coach
for various franchisees.

I request you to consider all the above credentials and employ me for this temporary role, I can be a part of your golf club
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
after receiving the offer based upon your convenience.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Wood

IELTS letter You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club. Write a letter to the manager of the golf club. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have tell him/her when you could start

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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