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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. rj6L
Dear Mr and Mrs Clara, I have seen your advertisement in a magazine. I ‘m interested in the role that you are offering. I would like to work for you because I think it will be an amazing experience for me and you as I love babies and It is my dream job since I have five years of experience to look after babies whose age is between 5 to 12 years old. although I have received many awards from many child care registered agencies that shows my extensive work experience in terms of honesty, caring of children. Apart from these details, I am having a bachelor degree in Arts and English so the time which I spend with children, I talk in english that help the children to communicate in English and help them to make beautiful paintings. I would like to visit new places, learn about various cultures, doing outdoor activities and making new friends in my free time. It is a great opportunity for me since I would be getting a chance to visit beautiful country Australia where I can have more access to my indoor as well as outdoor games. I look forward to hear positive response from your end Your Faithfully, Boddh Prakash
Dear Mr and Mrs Clara,

I have
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seen
your advertisement in a magazine. I ‘m interested in the role that you are offering.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to work for you
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because
I
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think
it will be an amazing experience for me and you as I
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love
babies and It is my dream job since I have five years of experience to look after babies whose age is
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 5 and 12".
between 5 to 12
years
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old
.

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although
I have received
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many
awards from
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many
child care registered agencies that
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shows
my extensive work experience in terms of honesty, caring of children. Apart from these
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details
, I am having a bachelor degree in Arts and English
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so
the time which I spend with children, I talk in
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english
that
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help
the children to communicate in English and
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help
them to
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make
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beautiful
paintings.

I would like to visit new places, learn about various cultures, doing outdoor activities and making new friends in my free time. It is a great opportunity for me since I would be getting a chance to visit
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beautiful
country Australia where I can have more access to my indoor
as well
as outdoor games.

I look forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
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positive
response from your
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end


Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
Faithfully
,

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Boddh
Prakash

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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