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You are living in your friend’s apartment while he is going on a holiday. In your letter include: -Why you are writing -What you break anything -Apologize for your mistake and how you can give him as a r eplacement

You are living in your friend’s apartment while he is going on a holiday. In your letter include: -Why you are writing -What you break anything -Apologize for your mistake and how you can give him as a r eplacement jbJg8
Dear Jean, I hope you’re thoroughly enjoying your vacation. It’s been a month you have been travelling since our last time meeting and it is so wonderful and touched for letting me stay your house while you are away. However, it is so ridiculous to tell you and want to apologise that I accidentally broke your favourite mug cup while I was preparing for my dinner. At that moment, my boss suddenly called me for an emergency job so I rushed myself to finish my meal as soon as possible. As a consequence, I crashed down the table that can make your cup split into pieces by falling onto the ground. I am really sorry to disturb your relaxation by telling it but I have tried my best to purchase a cup that precisely looks like this. However, it is really difficult as it is a limited cup. I really regret my mistake and even though we are best friends, I desire to give you something as a compensation. I hope you can understand my situation and please consider what you want as a replacement. Please take care of yourself and enjoy your holidays fully. Your friend, Lara
Dear Jean,

I hope you’re
thoroughly
enjoying your vacation. It’s been a month you have been travelling since our last time meeting and it is
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so
wonderful and touched for letting me stay your
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house
while you are away.

However
, it is
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so
ridiculous to
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tell
you and want to
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
that I
accidentally
broke your
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
mug
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cup
while I was preparing for my dinner. At that moment, my boss
suddenly
called me for an emergency job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I rushed myself to finish my meal as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. As a consequence, I crashed down the table that can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cup
split into pieces by falling onto the ground.

I am
really
sorry to disturb your relaxation by telling it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I have tried my best to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cup
that
precisely
looks like this.
However
, it is
really
difficult as it is a limited
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cup
. I
really
regret my mistake and
even though
we are best friends, I desire to give you something as a compensation.

I hope you can understand my situation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
consider what you want as a replacement.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
take care of yourself and enjoy your holidays
fully
.

Your friend,

Lara
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IELTS letter You are living in your friend’s apartment while he is going on a holiday. In your letter include: -Why you are writing -What you break anything -Apologize for your mistake and how you can give him as a r eplacement

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  American English
7 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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