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You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say where and when the class will be held give reasons why you think your friend might be interested suggest a time and place to meet to discuss the idea

Dear Deeba, I hope you will be doing great. I'm writing in order to get your attention for an exciting task! I am intended to join baking class and wish that you could accompany me. Let me explain its details to you. The venue of the proposed class will be Superior College where we spent our golden time of graduation. It will be on 1st of November and session that we will join will be in the afternoon. I know that you have expertise in baking but lacks in making it representable, particularly you are unable to decor cakes. So, this opportunity will not only polish your skill but also help you to generate ideas for presenting food. Moreover, by participating in this tutorial we will recall our past days, loud laughter and will greet our teachers. Will you available on this Sunday in the evening at my place? Or suggest some appropriate time for meeting to talk about further details and decision. Love, Afshan
Dear
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Deeba
,

I hope you will be doing great. I'm writing in order to
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get
your attention for an exciting task!
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I
am intended
to
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join
baking
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class
and wish that you could accompany me.
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Let
me
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explain
its
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details
to you.

The venue of the proposed
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class
will be Superior College where we spent our golden time of graduation. It will be on 1st of November and session that we will
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join
will be in the afternoon.

I know that you have expertise in baking
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but
lacks in making it representable,
particularly
you are unable to decor cakes.
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So
, this opportunity will not
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only
polish your
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skill
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but
also
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help
you to generate
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ideas
for presenting food.
Moreover
, by participating in this tutorial we will recall our past days, loud laughter and will greet our teachers.

Will you available on this Sunday in the evening at my place? Or suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
appropriate time for meeting to talk about
further
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details
and decision.

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Love
,

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Afshan

IELTS letter You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say where and when the class will be held give reasons why you think your friend might be interested suggest a time and place to meet to discuss the idea

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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