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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v.4

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v. 4
Dear Benjamin, Hope you are doing great. As per our earlier discussion, I am writing to refresh your mind that you will be looking after my house and pet during my vacation starting from 4th November. Thank you for agreeing to house-sit for me and I owe you a big one. You can contact me at my email, mobile phone or Facebook. I will check my emails and Facebook regularly. In case of an emergency, feel free to dial me on my mobile phone. I’ve written the numbers on a sticky note which I’ve left on the fridge. I have already stored the necessary food for my cat inside the kitchen cabinet. I have written down the feeding schedule on the back of the kitchen door. Just make sure the cat drinks plenty of fresh water every day. At night, my cat sleeps in a small bed made for her in the storeroom. She usually sleeps around 9: 00 pm, so you have to place her in the living room at that time. You are welcome to use things in my house as if they were yours. Moreover, I would appreciate if you switch on the garage lights after the sunset and turn it off in the morning. Also, pick up the newspaper from the lawn every morning. Hope to meet you soon. Warm wishes, Mansoor Afzal
Dear Benjamin,

Hope you are doing great. As per our earlier discussion, I am writing to refresh your mind that you will be looking after my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and pet during my vacation starting from 4th November. Thank you for agreeing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
-sit for me and I owe you a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
one.

You can contact me at my email, mobile phone or Facebook. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
my emails and Facebook
regularly
. In case of an emergency, feel free to dial me on my mobile phone. I’ve written the numbers on a sticky note which I’ve
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
on the fridge.

I have already stored the necessary food for my cat inside the kitchen cabinet.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have written down the feeding schedule on the back of the kitchen door.
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Just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure the cat drinks
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of fresh water every day. At night, my cat sleeps in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
bed made for her in the storeroom. She
usually
sleeps around 9: 00 pm,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you
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have to
place her in the living room at that time. You are welcome to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
things in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
as if they were yours.

Moreover
, I would appreciate if you switch on the garage lights after the sunset and turn it off in the morning.
Also
, pick up the newspaper from the lawn every morning.

Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

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Mansoor
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Afzal
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
226 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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