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A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v.2

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v. 2
Dear Ema, Thank you for agreeing to house-sit for me. It was a great relief when you agreed to take up the responsibilities. I would like to thank you for that and inform some of the chores you should take care of. If you need to contact me for any reason during my holiday in Thailand, please ring my mobile phone. I’ve written the numbers on a sticky note which I’ve left on the fridge. I will stay at the Mandarin Oriental Bangkok hotel and if I change my hotel, I will inform you of that. Alternatively, you can message me on WhatsApp or Imo. My cat needs to be fed twice daily so each morning and evening put a handful of cat food in his dish. You will find these in the kitchen pantry. Also, please check throughout the day to make sure he has fresh water. You can give him a small bowl of milk in the evening. I would like you to water my plants, too. The indoor ones in the lounge only need water once every few days but the plants on the balcony need to be watered daily unless there has been heavy rain. Finally, for security, please clear my mailbox every day and keep the outside lights on at night. I look forward to seeing you on my return. Warm wishes, Sophia
Dear
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Ema
,

Thank you for agreeing to
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house
-sit for me. It was a great relief when you
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agreed
to take up the responsibilities. I would like to thank you for that and inform
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some of the
chores you should take care of.

If you
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need
to contact me for any reason during my holiday in Thailand,
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please
ring my mobile phone. I’ve written the numbers on a sticky note which I’ve
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left
on the fridge. I will stay at the Mandarin Oriental Bangkok hotel and if I
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change
my hotel, I will inform you of that.
Alternatively
, you can message me on WhatsApp or
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Imo
.

My cat
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needs
to
be fed
twice daily
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so
each morning and evening put a handful of cat food in his dish. You will find these in the kitchen pantry.
Also
,
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please
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check
throughout the day to
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make
sure he has fresh water. You can give him a
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small
bowl of milk in the evening.

I would like you to water my plants, too. The indoor ones in the lounge
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only
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need
water once every few days
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but
the plants on the balcony
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to
be watered
daily unless there has been heavy rain.
Finally
, for security,
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please
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clear
my mailbox every day and
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keep
the outside lights on at night.

I look forward to seeing you on my return.

Warm wishes,

Sophia
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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