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You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: • explain what you need • say when you plan to be there • ask for information about prices

You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: • explain what you need • say when you plan to be there • ask for information about prices Xjmq
Dear Sir, I am John Smith a resident of India. I am writing this to ask some information about the rental apartment during my vacation in Singapore. As I am planning to visit this country for my holiday break, I need a place to live during my stay. I am coming alone so one bedroom, hall, and a kitchen is enough for me. Also it will be the grate if this place is on the city side thus I can explore and visit the local market for the shopping. I will be there on next week on the 24th November that is on Sunday morning at 10 o’clock. Due to long journey I will be tired so will looking for place to stay. The rental accommodation will be needed for almost one month. And one more thing the house must have heating system in proper working condition as I have heard that during this time the weather is cold and I am not comfortable with this. It will be grate if you can arrange this for me. If you find so, please let me know by the end of this week. In addition to this, the price must be shared before getting the confirmation about the booking of place. In anticipation for your kind co-operation. Yours truly, John Smith.
Dear Sir,

I am John Smith a resident of India. I am writing this to ask
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some
information about the rental apartment during my vacation in Singapore.

As I am planning to visit this country for my holiday break, I need a place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
during my stay. I am coming alone
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so
one bedroom, hall, and a kitchen is
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enough
for me.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
it will be the grate if this place is on the city side
thus
I can explore and visit the local market for the shopping. I will be there on
next
week on the 24th November
that is
on Sunday morning at 10 o’clock. Due to long journey I will
be tired
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so
will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "look"
looking
for place to stay. The rental accommodation will
be needed
for almost one month. And one more thing the
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house
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must
have heating system in proper working condition as I have heard that during this time the weather is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
cold and
I am not comfortable with this.

It will be
Consider using a past participle here: "grated".
grate
if you can arrange this for me. If you find
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so
,
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please
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let
me know by the
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end
of this week.
In addition
to this, the price
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must
be shared
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before
getting the confirmation about the booking of place.

In anticipation for your kind co-operation.

Yours
truly
,

John Smith.
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IELTS letter You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: • explain what you need • say when you plan to be there • ask for information about prices

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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