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you are going to another country to study you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. 1- give details of ur study plans 2- explain why you want to get a prt-time job 3- suggest how your friend could help you finad a job.

you are going to another country to study you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. 1- give details of ur study plans 2- explain why you want to get a prt-time job 3- suggest how your friend could help you finad a job. RQEY
Dear John, How are you? hope you are fine. I am writing this letter to get more details about the part-time jobs in your country. As you know i will travel to study pure mathmatics in Toronto, as you where there since your fisrt year at university you will have deffinetly all the details i need to find a part-time job. I want to study at the university of Toronto, and since the cost of studying there is too expensive im willing to find a part-time job to have the ability to pay all the fees. i have courses 5 days a week from 8: 00 AM till 2: 00 PM. In addition to that, i have some projects that i do after courses and i will be free from 3: 00 PM. Given that the payments are expensive, so the transportation fees from the university to my home. In addition to that, im alone there and don't have any thing to do after courses therefore, i think that finding a part-time job will be an opportunity to improve my social skill since i am new in Toronto. I suggest that you ask your boss if there is any vacancy where do you work at the central street Pizzeria or ask some of your old friends working in restaurants as a if there are empty places for part-time job employees I really apreciate your help, see you soon wish you a good weekend
Dear John,

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more
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about the part-time
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in your country. As you know
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will travel to study pure
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mathmatics


in Toronto, as you where there since your
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need to find a part-time job.

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willing to find a part-time
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to have the ability to pay all the fees.

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have courses 5 days a week from 8: 00 AM till 2: 00 PM.
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have
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projects that
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do after courses and
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will be free from 3: 00 PM.

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alone there and don't have
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do


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will be an opportunity to
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my social
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since
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am new in Toronto.

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if there are empty places for part-time
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employees

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IELTS letter you are going to another country to study you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. 1- give details of ur study plans 2- explain why you want to get a prt-time job 3- suggest how your friend could help you finad a job.

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