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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for sime help. Write to your friend- give detaila of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for sime help. Write to your friend- give detaila of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job. GMMko
Dear Maria, Hi! I hope this letter of mine find you in pink of your life. It's been agea since we've seen one another. I want to tell you that I am coming to Australia next month for doing my further study in financial management which will be for 2 years. As you know my financial condition is not Consequently good thats why I want to bear my own expenses and for that I would like to do a part-time job there. Since, you are living there for couple of years ago, so you must be knowing better what to do and when. I am going to live in hostel of the collage. I just need your help in find a job for me if you can. My claases could be from 9am to 1pm and afterward I have nothing to do, that time I can manage to working. I am sure you will find a suitable solution for my problem. I can't wait to see you. And din't forget to give my love to your family. With Regards, Joan
Dear Maria, Hi! I hope this letter of mine find you in pink of your life. It's been
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since we've
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seen
one another. I want to
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you that I am coming to Australia
next
month for doing my
further
study in financial management which will be for 2 years. As you know my financial condition is not
Consequently
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good
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thats
why I want to bear my
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own
expenses and for that I would like to do a part-time job there. Since, you are living there for
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couple of
years ago,
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so
you
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be knowing
better what to do and when. I am going to
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live
in hostel of the collage. I
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just
need your
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help
in find a job for me if you can. My
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claases
could be from 9am to 1pm and afterward I have nothing to do, that time I can manage to working. I am sure you will find a suitable solution for my problem. I can't wait to
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see
you. And
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din't
forget to give my
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love
to your family. With Regards,
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Joan
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for sime help. Write to your friend- give detaila of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

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