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You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

Dear sir, I am writing this letter to request your assistance in finding suitable accommodation for me during my training course at city college, Hamilton, New Zealand. I hope you will help me with this. I am currently working as a chartered accountant for a company in Auckland, New Zealand. As the training course, I enrolled for is the advancement of CA. But the location of the college is far away from the place I live. So it would be easy for me if I rent an apartment for this short duration. Coming to the requirements for my accommodation, I am looking for a shared apartment or a small room with an attached kitchen and bathroom. It would be great if I stay near to the college so that I can save time on the journey. My course will start in July and I am planning to arrive on the 27th of June, I will be glad if you find the accommodation before that. Looking forward to your quick response. Yours sincerely, Praveena P.
Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to request your assistance in finding suitable accommodation for me during my training course at city college, Hamilton, New Zealand. I hope you will
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help
me with this.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
currently
working as a chartered accountant for a
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company
in Auckland, New Zealand. As the training course, I enrolled for is the advancement of CA.
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But
the location of the college is far away from the place I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it would be easy for me if I rent an apartment for this short duration.

Coming to the requirements for my accommodation, I am looking for a shared apartment or a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
room with an attached kitchen and bathroom. It would be great if I stay near to the college
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can save time on the journey.

My course will
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start
in
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
July and
I am planning to arrive on the 27th of June, I will be glad if you find the accommodation
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before
that.

Looking forward to your quick response.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Praveena
P.
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IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in New Zealand. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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  American English
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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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