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You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it qK0r
Dear Ms. Rose, I am writing to inform you that I am looking for an accommodation in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. My name is Paul Smith, a professional working with Unilever. My company has offered me to do a short training course of 3 months in Greenmount, Ireland for which I will be travelling next week. Due to time pressure and work load, it is very difficult to find an accommodation near college. Moreover, language barrier is a major issue, as I cannot communicate in the local language. I would like to request you to help me find me an accommodation near to my college. I am very adjustable when it comes to stay as my job demands too much travelling across the country. I am looking for a fully furnished one bedroom apartment with balcony preferred near the college. My company has given me a budget of $1500 for the accommodation. Also, a small request, if its possible to get an apartment off the main road. I will be landing on 14th July at 9 am and I will be staying with my cousin over the weekend. I need my own place to stay from 16th July to 15th October. I will reach the accommodation office to collect the keys of my accommodation on Monday, 16th July at 8 am and complete the formalities. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Paul Smith
Dear Ms. Rose,

I am writing to inform you that I am looking for an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
in
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Greenmount
, Northern Ireland.

My name is Paul Smith, a professional working with Unilever. My
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company
has offered me to do a short training course of 3 months in
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Greenmount
, Ireland for which I will be travelling
next
week. Due to time pressure and work load, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult to find an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
near college.
Moreover
, language barrier is a major issue, as I cannot communicate in the local language. I would like to request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me find me an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
accommodation
near to my college.

I am
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very
adjustable when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to stay as my job demands too much travelling across the country.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking for a
fully
furnished
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one bedroom
apartment with balcony preferred near the college. My
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me a budget of $1500 for the
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accommodation
.
Also
, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
request, if
Did you mean "it is"?
its
possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an apartment off the main road.

I will be landing on 14th July at 9 am and I will be staying with my cousin over the weekend. I need my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
place to stay from 16th July to 15th October.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will reach the
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accommodation
office to collect the keys of my
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accommodation
on
Did you mean to refer to the current year? 16th July 2021 is not a Monday, but a Friday.
Monday, 16th July
at 8 am and complete the formalities.

Thanking you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Paul Smith
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IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a collage in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter, explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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