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You went to watch a movie in a nearby cinema hall recently, You found that the hall was in poor condition. Write a letter to the manager of the cinema hall.

You went to watch a movie in a nearby cinema hall recently, You found that the hall was in poor condition. Write a letter to the manager of the cinema hall. 0oa3
Dear Patel, I am your regular visitor. I always satisfy with your service and amenities but last night experience distracting me. I booked show yesterday night at 9: 00pm when I was reached there I felt very disturbing because as per Government guideline for current time period arrange sanitization room at entrance of all multiplex but at your place no any arrangement is there. In more people was not maintain social distance even no one was there for cure. Also some were not wear mask and don’t sanitize there hand. For that I concerned respected person but no one pay attention. In addition condition of cleanness was not well looked like open theater because not feeing fresh air in the cinema. I suggest you should take care of public health because health is wealth and should understand seriousness of situation. Please look into the matter and do the necessary. Yours Sincerely, Jignesh
Dear Patel,

I am your regular visitor. I always satisfy with your service and amenities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
last night experience distracting me.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
booked
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
This is a non-standard collocation. Normally, "last night" is used.
yesterday night
at 9: 00pm when I
was reached
there I felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
disturbing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
as per
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
guideline for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
time period arrange sanitization room at entrance of all multiplex
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
at your place
Did you mean "now" (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
no
any arrangement is there. In more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
was not maintain social distance even no one was there for cure.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
were not
Consider using a past participle here: "worn".
wear
mask and don’t sanitize there hand. For that I concerned respected person
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
no one pay attention. In
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
addition
condition of cleanness was not well looked like open theater
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
not
Possible spelling mistake found.
feeing
fresh air in the cinema.

I suggest you should take care of public health
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
health is wealth and should understand seriousness of situation.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
look into the matter and do the necessary.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Jignesh

IELTS letter You went to watch a movie in a nearby cinema hall recently, You found that the hall was in poor condition. Write a letter to the manager of the cinema hall.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
151 words
5.0
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