Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college. qo7r
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inform you that I will be attending the Advanced Life Insurance course, being held from Tuesday 24th April until 27th April, at the University of Hartford. I will be arriving on the afternoon of Monday 23th and will be leaving on the morning of Saturday the 28th of April, so I will require a single room for this time. I would prefer my own bathroom, if this is possible, but do not mind sharing if I have to; however, as I am wheelchair bound, the room will have to be disability friendly. Could you please tell me how much this will cost and how I should make a payment? Do you accept VISA? As I do not know the area, I would also be grateful if you could provide some information about getting to and from the University. Will I need to take public transport from the station or is there a University bus service? Any information on what to see and do in the area would also be greatly appreciated. Thank you for your assistance. Alex Jones
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I will be attending the Advanced Life Insurance course,
being held
from Tuesday 24th April until 27th April, at the University of Hartford.

I will be arriving on the afternoon of Monday
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
23th
and will be leaving on the morning of Saturday the 28th of April,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will require a single room for this time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would prefer my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
bathroom, if this is possible,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
do not mind sharing if I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
;
however
, as I am wheelchair bound, the room will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be disability friendly. Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me how much this will cost and how I should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a payment? Do you accept VISA?

As I do not know the area, I would
also
be grateful if you could provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about getting to and from the University. Will I need to take public transport from the station or is there a University bus service? Any information on what to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
and do in the area would
also
be
greatly
appreciated.

Thank you for your assistance.

Alex Jones

IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.