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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college. EXVL
Dear Sir, I have just registered for one-month English course at your college and college management has assigned me the first batch. I will be arriving at London airport on the first of November and have booked return flight to India for the first of December. At present, I have no relatives or friends in London, so I would prefer to rent an accommodation through your institute. To let you know, I have no objection in sharing the room, on a condition that there should not be more than two people in the room, including me. Moreover, the house should be well maintained which includes proper wall paint, no water leakage, and atop, the heating system should be working properly as it will be winter season. Further, London is a totally strange city for me, so I need the information from you about the local transportation to commute between my residence and the college. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Alpesh Kumar
Dear Sir,

I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
registered for one-month English course at your college and college management has assigned me the
first
batch. I will be arriving at London airport on the
first
of November and have booked return flight to India for the
first
of December.

At present, I have no relatives or friends in London,
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so
I would prefer to rent
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "accommodation".
an accommodation
through your institute. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know, I have no objection in sharing the room, on a condition that there should not be more than two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the room, including me.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
should be well maintained which includes proper wall paint, no water leakage, and atop, the heating system should be working
properly
as it will be winter season.

Further
, London is a
totally
strange city for me,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I need the information from you about the local transportation to commute between my residence and the college.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Alpesh
Kumar
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IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
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