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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college. MKYa
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will be attending the CS101 course offered by Bright University at its New York campus from June 1st to August 1st. I will require accommodation for the specified duration. Allow me to elaborate. I am a resident of Spain and am attending the course as part of a foreign exchange programme. The course teaches and trains people in basic computer skills. My flight arrives at JFK airport at 7. 30 am on June 1st. My departure is set for Aug 2nd in the evening. I need accommodation for the entire period. I am looking for a single room with a bed, mattress, sheets and a pillow. Since I am a non-smoker I would prefer non-smokers as my neighbours. I would also need a suitable Wi-Fi connection to connect my laptop to the internet for completing the assignments. I don’t mind sharing the bathroom with other students. I would be grateful if you could help me with the transport facilities available for my daily commute. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Daniel
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I will be attending the CS101 course offered by Bright University at its New York campus from June 1st to August 1st. I will require accommodation for the specified duration.

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Allow
me to elaborate. I am a resident of Spain and
Did you mean "am I"?
am
attending the course as part of a foreign exchange
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programme
. The course teaches and trains
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in basic computer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. My flight arrives at JFK airport at 7. 30 am on June 1st. My departure
is set
for Aug 2nd in the evening. I need accommodation for the entire period. I am looking for a single room with a bed, mattress, sheets and a pillow.

Since I am a non-smoker I would prefer non-smokers as my
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
. I would
also
need a suitable Wi-Fi connection to connect my laptop to the internet for completing the assignments. I don’t mind sharing the bathroom with other students.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would be grateful if you could
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help
me with the transport facilities available for my daily commute.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Daniel
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IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

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