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One of your friends has asked to be a partner in this new business. Write a letter to you friend. In your letter: Give your opinion of your friend’s idea Tell him whether you have decided to accept the offer Explain your reason for the decision

One of your friends has asked to be a partner in this new business. Write a letter to you friend. In your letter: Give your opinion of your friend’s idea Tell him whether you have decided to accept the offer Explain your reason for the decision rr8L
Dear Mark, Hope you’re doing good with health and prosperity. I’m writing this to inform you about my decision on our business proposal. First of all, I was very much impressed on your business plan. Opening a café in Wilson street is definitely a good move, moreover I heard that there is no café with affordable prices within 30km range. Certainly, this can be an added advantage to get succeed. Of course, I’m very thankful for considering me as your business partner, after discussing with my family and friends I’m glad to join my hands with you and be a part of this wonderful business venture. As I know you from so long and your successful projects in past, I’m pretty sure that you have taken certain considerations to put this plan. From my side, I have also done some analysis and background work about the plan and very much excited about the results. This is also one of the reasons to be part of your up-coming project. Looking forward to work with you soon and convey my best wishes to your family. Your friend, Jack
Dear Mark,

Hope you’re doing
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good
with health and prosperity. I’m writing this to inform you about my decision on our
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business
proposal.

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First of all
, I was
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very
much impressed on your
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business
plan. Opening a café in Wilson street is definitely a
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good
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move
,
moreover
I heard that there is no café with affordable prices within
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30km
range.
Certainly
, this can be an
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added
advantage to
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get
succeed.

Of course
, I’m
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very
thankful for considering me as your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
partner, after discussing with my family and friends I’m glad to
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join
my hands with you and be a part of this wonderful
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business
venture.

As I know you from
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so
long and your successful projects
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in past
, I’m pretty sure that you have taken certain considerations to put this plan. From my side, I have
also
done
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some
analysis and background work about the plan and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much excited about the results. This is
also
one of the reasons to be part of your up-coming project.

Looking forward to work with you
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soon
and convey my best wishes to your family.

Your friend,

Jack
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IELTS letter One of your friends has asked to be a partner in this new business. Write a letter to you friend. In your letter: Give your opinion of your friend’s idea Tell him whether you have decided to accept the offer Explain your reason for the decision

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  American English
8 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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