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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college. N0q0
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to accommodation facilities in your college hostel. I heard numerous positive responses about your college because of which I have joined a short-term specialization course on Modern History. My course is commencing from 1st of April 2021 and will last for about a month. I will be arriving on 30th March in order to settle in the hostel room before my course begins. My departure will be on 2nd of May. I will be new to this country and have no idea about the accommodation in the city. I was informed that the university provides hostel facility free of charge to registered students. Kindly help me in arranging a shared room with a person who is also registered in the same course. Since, I am a vegetarian it would be great if I can have simple, veg food and would also require laundry facility. Since I am not aware of the distance between the university and hostel, I would like to know about the transportation facilities that are available and what would be best and affordable way of commuting to and from college so that I can save some money. Please respond at the earliest convenience. Yours faithfully Manasa Polavarapu
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to accommodation facilities in your college hostel.

I heard numerous
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positive
responses about your college
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because
of which I have
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joined
a short-term specialization
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course
on Modern History. My
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course
is commencing from 1st of April 2021 and will last for about a month. I will be arriving on 30th March in order to settle in the hostel room
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before
my
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course
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begins
. My departure will be on 2nd of May.

I will be new to this country and have no
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idea
about the accommodation in the city. I
was informed
that the university provides hostel facility free of charge to registered students. Kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in arranging a shared room with a person who is
also
registered in the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. Since, I am a vegetarian it would be great if I can have simple, veg food and would
also
require laundry facility.

Since I am not aware of the distance between the university and hostel, I would like to know about the transportation facilities that are available and what would be best and affordable way of commuting to and from college
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so
that I can save
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some
money.

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Please
respond at the earliest convenience.

Yours
faithfully


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IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

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