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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v.6

You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v. 6
Dear Valentina, Thank you for agreeing to house-sit for me the whole week while I will be away in Bali, Indonesia. If you need to contact me during this time, I’ll be staying at the Liberty Dive Resort. If it’s urgent, however, please ring my mobile phone, which I’ll keep with me at all times. My cat, Tommy, needs to be fed twice daily so each morning and evening put a handful of his food in his dish. I have reserved enough food for him and you can find it in the kitchen cabinet marked as Tommy. Also, please check throughout the day to make sure he has fresh water. You can give him a small bowl of milk in the evening. Finally, let him play outside in the evening but make sure he gets back before the dark settles in. I would like you to water my plants, too. The indoor ones in the lounge only need water once every few days but the plants on the balcony need to be watered daily unless there has been heavy rain. Finally, for security, please clear my mailbox every day and keep the outside lights on at night. I look forward to seeing you on my return. Yours, Isabella
Dear Valentina,

Thank you for agreeing to
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house
-sit for me the whole week while I will be away in Bali, Indonesia. If you
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need
to contact me during this time, I’ll be staying at the Liberty Dive Resort. If it’s urgent,
however
,
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please
ring my mobile phone, which I’ll
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keep
with me at all times.

My cat, Tommy,
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needs
to
be fed
twice daily
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so
each morning and evening put a handful of his food in his dish. I have reserved
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enough
food for him and you can find it in the kitchen cabinet marked as Tommy.
Also
,
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please
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check
throughout the day to
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make
sure he has fresh water. You can give him a
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small
bowl of milk in the evening.
Finally
,
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let
him play outside in the evening
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but
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make
sure he
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gets
back
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before
the dark settles in.

I would like you to water my plants, too. The indoor ones in the lounge
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only
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need
water once every few days
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but
the plants on the balcony
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
to
be watered
daily unless there has been heavy rain.
Finally
, for security,
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please
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clear
my mailbox every day and
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keep
the outside lights on at night.

I look forward to seeing you on my return.

Yours,

Isabella
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS letter You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. v. 6

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  American English
7 paragraphs
207 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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