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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v.7

You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v. 7
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to thank you for offering me the assistant manager post in your organisation. However, I regret to inform you that I am suffering from viral fever severely for the last couple of days and my doctor has predicted that it would take me another week to recover. So instead of reporting on first February, I need an additional two weeks to start my work in Smith and Sons. During the interview, I informed you that I require 15 days to finish my office works with the current employer. Unfortunately, the fever means I need another week to complete the pending tasks before I can be released from my current company. I would hence request you to consider a delay in my joining. I am positive that I can join the office on the 15th of February. I must express that I am eagerly waiting to join your company. My sincere apology for any inconvenience caused due to this but considering the situation, I am hoping you would allow me the delay in joining your company. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Mahtab Uddin
Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to thank you for offering me the assistant manager post in your
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.
organisation
.
However
, I regret to inform you that I am suffering from viral fever
severely
for the last couple of days and my doctor has predicted that it would take me another week to recover.
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So
instead
of reporting on
first
February, I need an additional two weeks to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my work in Smith and Sons.

During the interview, I informed you that I require 15 days to finish my office works with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer. Unfortunately, the fever means I need another week to complete the pending tasks
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I can
be released
from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I would
hence
request you to consider a delay in my joining. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the office on the 15th of February.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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must
express that I am
eagerly
waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. My sincere apology for any inconvenience caused due to this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
considering the situation, I am hoping you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me the delay in joining your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mahtab
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Uddin
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v. 7

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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