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You are currently taking a course at a college but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In the letter give details of your course explain why you need a week off say what you want the Principal to do.

You are currently taking a course at a college but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In the letter give details of your course explain why you need a week off say what you want the Principal to do. 6bl3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask a leave for seven days because of my mothers treatment. I am doing Post Graduate Diploma in Human Resource Management at your college. I already taken first semister exam, and make a good mark in the exam. However, yesterday I got a letter from my mother, and I learnt that she is suffering from kidney disease. My mother is broken mentally. I need to take her to a specialist doctor for better treatment. She is 60 years old, and I am the only daughter of my mother: Visiting to the doctor and medical examinations will take 7 days. Therefore, I am badly in need of seven-day leave. It would be kind of you if you grant my leave for a week. I will collect lecture notes of those days from my friends, and they agreed to help me in this situation. Thanks for consider my situation. Yours faithfully, Shamima
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to ask a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for seven days
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of my mothers treatment.

I am doing Post Graduate Diploma in Human Resource Management at your college.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
already taken
first
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semister
exam, and
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make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
mark in the exam.
However
, yesterday I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a letter from my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
, and I
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learnt
that she is suffering from kidney disease. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
is broken
mentally. I need to take her to a specialist doctor for better treatment. She is 60 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
, and I am the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
daughter of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
: Visiting to the doctor and medical examinations will take 7 days.

Therefore
, I am
badly
in need of seven-day
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
. It would be kind of you if you grant my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
for a week. I will collect lecture notes of those days from my friends, and they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in this situation.

Thanks for consider my situation.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Shamima

IELTS letter You are currently taking a course at a college but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In the letter give details of your course explain why you need a week off say what you want the Principal to do.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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