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You work for an international company and you would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager, Explain why you want to work in company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

You work for an international company and you would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager, Explain why you want to work in company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it. P2Lj
Dear Sir, I am khushboo trivedi who is one of your intellectual and wholehearted employee since five years. I would like to share my willingness about working in our head office which is situated in United states of America. I would like to work for a half year over there with liability. It is my honor that I am working with such an evolving company whose head quarter is in USA. We all know that our company is working on vital and real time project on water sustainability which is operated through main office. It is quit fascinating that I had done my research work on it. Hence, I would be passionate to share my ideas and put my hands on to accomplish this project. However, I am not denied to fulfill my current duties. While performing on new project, I am assuring you that it won’t affect an end outcome. As you know, I already handled two projects simultaneously as well as accomplished it with fruitful result. I hope you have trust on my abilities and give your affords to be included in most trending project in our head office. You could recommendation and share my skills to them. I am definitely sure that you will convince them because they take your advice on priority as you are loyal and trustworthy as well as most knowledgeable person of the company. If any help or consignment is needed from my side, I am always ready for it. I am eagerly waiting for invitation for me. Thank you in advanced. Yours Sincerely, Khushboo Trivedi
Dear Sir,

I am
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khushboo
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trivedi
who is one of your intellectual and wholehearted employee
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since
five years. I would like to share my willingness about working in our head office which
is situated
in
If the term is a proper noun, use the suggested capitalization.
United states of America
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to work for a half year over there with liability.

It is my honor that I am working with such an evolving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
whose head quarter is
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
. We all know that our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is working on vital and real time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
on water sustainability which
is operated
through main office. It
is quit
fascinating that I had done my research work on it.
Hence
, I would be passionate to share my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and put my hands on to accomplish this project.

However
, I am not
The verb 'denied' is used with the gerund form: "denied fulfilling".
denied to fulfill
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
duties. While performing on new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
, I am assuring you that it won’t affect an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
outcome. As you know, I already handled two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
projects
simultaneously
as well
as accomplished it with fruitful result.

I hope you have trust on my abilities and give your affords to
be included
in most trending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
project
in our head office. You
The word 'recommendation' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
could recommendation
and share my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to them. I am definitely sure that you will convince them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they take your advice on priority as you are loyal and trustworthy
as well
as most knowledgeable person of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

If any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
or consignment
is needed
from my side, I am always ready for it. I am
eagerly
waiting for invitation for me. Thank you in
Did you mean "advance"?
advanced
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Khushboo
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Trivedi
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IELTS letter You work for an international company and you would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. WAL to your manager, Explain why you want to work in company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

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