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You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing today to inform you about the worrisome condition of our beloved High Park. A few days ago, I was walking around the park with my dog and couldn’t help but notice how contaminated all the park's main areas are: the lawns, the playgrounds, and even the pound. Anywhere we went, we encountered an enormous amount of cans, plastic bottles and other footprints of human reckless/irresponsible behaviour. This situation is very frustrating and unheard of; it concerns me deeply, especially as a member of Greenpeace association and our municipal community. Not only is it very harmful to our children, pets and environment, but also aesthetically unpleasing. If we don’t take care of the trash in the next few weeks, it will cause serious deterioration of the park ecosystem in the future. I would like to attract park auhorities’ attention to this matter and ask to work on the above-mentioned areas' cleanliness. Please, take all the necessary measures to improve the situation. I know many people in the neighbourhood who deeply care about the park and will be willing to volunteer. I will be happy to participate in cleaning events as well, please feel free to reach out to me. Thank you very much for your time and consideration. Sincerely,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing
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to inform you about the worrisome condition of our beloved High
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Park
. A few days ago, I was walking around the
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park
with my dog and couldn’t
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help
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but
notice how contaminated all the park's main areas are: the lawns, the playgrounds, and even the pound. Anywhere we went, we encountered an enormous amount of cans, plastic bottles and other footprints of human reckless/irresponsible
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behaviour
.

This situation is
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very
frustrating and unheard of; it concerns me
deeply
,
especially
as a member of Greenpeace association and our municipal community. Not
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only
is it
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very
harmful to our children, pets and environment,
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but
also
aesthetically
unpleasing. If we don’t take care of the trash in the
next
few weeks, it will cause serious deterioration of the
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park
ecosystem in the future.

I would like to attract
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park
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auhorities
’ attention to this matter and ask to work on the above-mentioned areas' cleanliness.
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Please
, take all the necessary measures to
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improve
the situation. I know
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many
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people
in the
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neighbourhood
who
deeply
care about the
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park
and will be willing to volunteer.

I will be happy to participate in cleaning
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events
as well
,
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please
feel free to reach out to me.

Thank you
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very
much for your time and consideration.

Sincerely
,

IELTS letter You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park

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  American English
7 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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