Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You applied to work at an international summer camp for children, and you have now received a reply from the manager, Martin Wilson. Read Mr Wilson’s letter and the notes you have made. Then write an email to Mr Wilson, using all your notes.

You applied to work at an international summer camp for children, and you have now received a reply from the manager, Martin Wilson. Read Mr Wilson’s letter and the notes you have made. Then write an email to Mr Wilson, using all your notes. 1n70G
Dear M. Wilson, I’m writing in response to some queries which I have received recently from you. Besides, I would like to enquire some further information about the position at an international summer camp for children. First of all, regarding evening work, I regret to tell you that I am incapable of doing the night shift because I may encounter many dangerous circumstances on the road if I go alone. Secondly, as you mentioned about the recruitment of novel members for your camp, organised in the mountains. I would be helpful if you could tell me about the number of staff whom you need for this job. Thirdly, I will be overjoyed if I have an opportunity to work a full-time job at your camp. After completing the final exam at my school, I would prefer to do it in the period from 10th to 15th in July. Finally, you can completely believe me as I have undergone the same types of work before. In addition, my english level is currently B2 and I have good interpersonal skills as well as essential soft skills to be willing to solve many emergencies. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Jade
Dear M. Wilson,

I’m writing in response to
some
queries which I have received recently from you.
Besides
, I would like to
enquire
some
further
information about the position at an international summer camp for children.

First of all
, regarding evening work, I regret to
tell
you that I am incapable of doing the night shift
because
I may encounter
many
dangerous
circumstances on the road if I go alone.

Secondly
, as you
mentioned about the
recruitment of novel members for your camp,
organised
in the mountains. I would be helpful if you could
tell
me about the number of staff whom you need for this job.

Thirdly
, I will
be overjoyed
if I have an opportunity to work a full-time job at your camp. After completing the final exam at my school, I would prefer to do it in the period from 10th to 15th in July.

Finally
, you can completely believe me as I have undergone the same types of work
before
.
In addition
, my
english
level is
currently
B2 and I have
good
interpersonal
skills
as well
as essential soft
skills
to be willing to solve
many
emergencies.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jade
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS letter You applied to work at an international summer camp for children, and you have now received a reply from the manager, Martin Wilson. Read Mr Wilson’s letter and the notes you have made. Then write an email to Mr Wilson, using all your notes.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6.5band
    You are thinking of starting the same course which your friend took last year. You have some questions about this course.
    Dear John, It is great to hear from you after such a long time. I am so happy for you on your decision to apply for the Master’s degree program in industrial engineering at University of Houston. Let me share some details about this course. It is a 33 credits degree program and takes 1. 5 to 2 yea...
  • 6band
    Complaint letter about my partner
    Dear Sir: I would like to express my dissatisfaction with my partner named Tom Smith I lived since I entered University last year. I entered University last year and I have to stay there and you gave me a room which I may live there. But I have a problem with my. Because now I have an exam for my ...
  • 6.5band
    Complaint letter about my roommate
    Dear Sir: I would like to express my dissatisfaction with my partner named Tom Smith I lived since I entered University last year. I entered University last year and I have to stay there and you gave me an area which I may live there. On the contrary I have a problem with my. Because now I have an...
  • 5band
    Interfering clasmate whis his problams
    Dear Mr. Director I am writing to complain about my roommate. He is a computer programmer. He always press the button loudly and it is interfering me. About myself. My friends colled me Tom and I am studying 234th group. I wil always be on good terms with him, but thera are some inconvenience with ...
  • 5band
    university addmition for study abroad
    Dear Professor W. J. Zhang I am a graduate student of mechanical engineering from Azad university, Iran. I chose to work on new hybrid machining for advanced materials as my M. sc. thesis. In fact, I am very interested in manufacturing process. I have reviewed your research profile and found myself...
  • 6band
    Your friend wants some advice on what she should take with her on her first trip abroad.
    Dear Richard. I am writing in reply in your letter asking for advice about your first trip abroad. First of all you should learn foreign language. If you know, you will speak a person who comes another country or one who acknowledges a lingo. Secondly, you should select a good accomplice. In light o...





Get more results for topic: