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You are a young entrepreneur and want to start a new business. Write a letter to your friend seeking some suggestions for the same. Include -let him know about new line of business that you intend to enter into -let him know why you consider him as an important person for advice -seek his advice

You are a young entrepreneur and want to start a new business. Write a letter to your friend seeking some suggestions for the same. Include -let him know about new line of business that you intend to enter into -let him know why you consider him as an important person for advice -seek his advice Knlww
Dear Bob, I hope you and your family is doing well. Though it has been a long time to have a professional discussion with you but the last thing you suggested me really worked for me. You will be glad to know I am venturing into pharmacy business following your advice. As you know, I always have a zeal to enter medical field. I have recently completed an online one-year diploma course in pharmacy from National University, Singapore. As I got distinction in sales and marketing in medicine, it inspires me to open a whole-sale pharmacy in the same. As per planning, I will receive drugs directly from the manufacturers, thus, offer some exclusive discounts to both retailers and medical practitioners. Your achievements in market management of vaccine encouraged me to follow my intuition. Your words of wisdom have paved a path for me and inculcate the positive attitude, work spirit and honesty in me. Again, I need your suggestions and some leads of manufacturers from where I can start with. It is really difficult to reach your level in business however, your expertise can boost me to be a successful young entrepreneur. I hope to get a response soon. Thanks and Regards Deepika
Dear Bob,

I hope you and your family is doing well. Though it has been a long time to have a professional discussion with you
but
the last thing you suggested me
really
worked for me. You will be glad to know I am venturing into pharmacy business following your advice.

As you know, I always have a zeal to enter medical field. I have recently completed an online one-year diploma course in pharmacy from National University, Singapore. As I
got
distinction in sales and marketing in medicine, it inspires me to open a whole-sale pharmacy in the same. As per planning, I will receive drugs
directly
from the manufacturers,
thus
, offer
some
exclusive discounts to both retailers and medical practitioners. Your achievements in market management of vaccine encouraged me to follow my intuition.

Your words of wisdom have paved a path for me and inculcate the
positive
attitude, work spirit and honesty in me. Again, I need your suggestions and
some
leads of manufacturers from where I can
start
with. It is
really
difficult to reach your level in business
however
, your expertise can boost me to be a successful young entrepreneur.

I hope to
get
a response
soon
.

Thanks and Regards

Deepika
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IELTS letter You are a young entrepreneur and want to start a new business. Write a letter to your friend seeking some suggestions for the same. Include -let him know about new line of business that you intend to enter into -let him know why you consider him as an important person for advice -seek his advice

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  American English
6 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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